As you might remember from last week's Fun assignment, I said to double your short story word count. In my case, I had to go from 38 to 76 words. Here's what I did:
A dank mist hung in the air as I ran my hands along the cold
stone walls. Unlatching the metal gate, I exited through a secret door. The
secluded passage gave way to a clearing as gleaming sunlight burst into my
eyes. Cascading colors of emerald, ruby, sapphire, and amber flooded my sight
as I drank in the vision of a lush and fertile garden. Warmth drenched me as
the chill of dank air evaporated away.
The evolution of this narrative shows that even though individual words can change the basics remain the same. I added words and also changed or eliminated others that didn't help advance the descriptive narrative. Changing parts that don't work or just sound wrong are part of the writing process. It may be painful at times, but rewarding and fulfilling other times. Don't be afraid to try.
I'll be continuing on with this short story and we'll see where it leads. If you're feeling brave, I'd love to read what you've come up with.
Thanks for reading.
Questions and comments are welcome.